Wikipedia:Peer review/Joh Bjelke-Petersen/archive1

Joh Bjelke-Petersen

Having recently died, he is currently receiving a lot of press attention and I'm trying to make his article as good as possible. I'm aware that there are some flaws, most notably the lack of references, but I do plan to remedy that over the coming months by consulting various biographies. With that in mind, would people mind giving it the once-over? I'm particularly concerned that the article correctly presents both sides in the myriad controversies associated with his rule. Slac speak up! 23:38, 25 Apr 2005 (UTC)

A few things that come to mind, information on his marrige to Flo, and his role in the SEQEB strike in 1985 and opposition to the state funeral. Try and work the quotes into to the text, or move them to Wikiquote--nixie 00:42, 28 Apr 2005 (UTC)

Yeah, I didn't put them in. I was planning to shift them there myself. Slac speak up! 01:53, 28 Apr 2005 (UTC)

a) For most of the early sections there are no references given. This needs to be improved (as you've already said). The references in the later sections are made as direct links, which means that if the target page is moved or modified it will be impossible to tell the intention. If you converted to footnotes or another system of inline references and stored full reference information (author, publication, date, date of retrieval for use as a reference, a one sentence summary), this would be much better. b) "fobbing off journalists with irrelevant non-answers" (for example) is questionably phrased and needs to be backed up with quotes. c) quotes might be mirrored in wikiquote and possibly only specific ones selected. probably better to spread them through the article to illustrate specific points, than to group them (which can be done in wikiquote). Mozzerati 20:59, 2005 May 10 (UTC)